I decided to revise my second story previously titled “Despite it All” now “See Me”. I felt that my first story was well contained and making changes to it would only be overworking it. My second story, however, did not receive as much as the love and care as my first story did.

Thanks to my meeting with Jesse and the workshop in class, I decided to add in details to give a bit more context and body to the relationship between Preston and Theo as well as highlighting Theo’s feelings when she finally leaves the abusive relationship with Preston.

I first started off by adding another scene of Preston and Theo when they were in college. Jesse and I discussed how the first time we see the couple in college, it gives a good context for what they’re like and how their relationship started off. I added another scene of the couple in their college days and even included the interactions between their family to show how overwhelming his family is and also how the relationship already has sour bits to it.

I also added a bit more of Theo’s inner monologue when she is finally in the hotel by herself. I originally felt that the ending wrapped up way too soon, even though I did like the connection between the title and the Nat Geo special Theo was watching. However, with the added context of Theo doing whatever she wanted to without worrying about the backlash from Preston.

Overall, I really liked adding these changes to the story and I feel they add more character. Hopefully, this will communicate what I was trying to convey in the first draft.